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Terrie
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« on: March 30, 2010, 12:06:18 PM »

I am having a problem with taste, touch and smell.  seems sight and sound comes more naturally.
describing a place using taste especially is a hard one for me.  Touch should be easy but I am still stumbling on it. Smell I have used but probally not enough. 
I am trying to describe the Island we lived on every summer. It is in a lake in central Maine. Maybe I need to narrow it down some I'm not sure. but things i saw were the island residents like moose, birds, turtles, frogs  etc. the sound of loons, crickets, owls, whipporwils. the touch of the sand, the water, ideas? the smell of her bogs, maybe a dead fish? I dont know....  Taste!  What do I remember about tasteing the island?  thats a real kicker   I just dont know   Any Ideas would be helpful and thanks for your ear.        Terrie
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« Reply #1 on: March 30, 2010, 12:47:04 PM »

If there isn't anything to taste, that's fine. 

Smell and touch - what about flowers?  Moss?  Trees?  What does the air smell like first thing in the morning, at night, or just after a rain?  What about the place makes (or made) you feel "at home" or "welcome" when you arrived for the first time each year?

Try closing your eyes and imagine you are back there.  Spend as much time as you need to with your vision.  It takes time.  I would think that once you do this several times, you get better at it.  Basically, you are spending time in your setting.  I have used that technique for other assignments, and it seems to work well for me.

I hope that helps a little bit!

Beth
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« Reply #2 on: March 30, 2010, 01:17:50 PM »

Thanks for the thoughts.  I tried color coding the senses like it suggested in the book.  I got all kinds of sights,  a little sound, one taste, two smells,  and one touch.  It dont look like a rainbow lol

I would not want to be blind in my world, I would have a very bland existance. Maybe thats what I should do? try describing it as if I couldnt see? that might enhance the other senses and stop the overload on the sights? 

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« Reply #3 on: March 30, 2010, 01:28:34 PM »

Sounds like you have plenty of variety. It's hard to include taste unless you're describing your favorite dinner table as a kid.
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« Reply #4 on: March 30, 2010, 03:06:45 PM »

I have the 500 words but to me it lacks everything but sight and maybe sound. I tend to be over critical of my own writing so maybe why this is bugging me so much.
maybe its teaching me that I dont use the other senses enough in real life and i need to use them more. 

Thanks for the replys  Terrie
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« Reply #5 on: April 02, 2010, 06:59:08 PM »

I have 529 words  and ive nicked picked it to death   
How many words over do they allow as a leeway if any? 
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« Reply #6 on: April 02, 2010, 07:44:19 PM »

Hi Terrie

For my #3 I described the rocky beach where I grew up. It was by the salt water. I always remember the taste of the salt on my lips when I licked them. I loved playing on the beach and often hours went by.
Did you have a favorite food that when you eat it brings you back to the island.
Hope this is helpful.

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« Reply #7 on: May 18, 2010, 06:31:59 PM »

It is so funny how previous life experience can really help with our writing. As an herbalist we practice assignments called 'herb labs' in the lab the student (I was once a student/ now the instructor) will have an herb to work with. They will have to list every aspect of that herb (taste, smell, color etc) you would be surprised how hard it can be to describe some herbs! Bitter, sweet and sour are pretty straight forward but what about slimy with a bland and then slightly bitter after taste?
Anyway, I found working with herbs really helps me with my senses.
Also, I am always on the look out for medicinal and edible herbs, even in the city. When you are that close to the ground, looking for that small detail (asking yourself, what is that plant?) You notice so many more small details about place.
Also, having small children is a real blessing. We were at the zoo the other day. Sure they were fascinated with the animals, but for the most part both of them (ages 23 months and 3 yrs) would focus on the plants/ bugs/ dirt that were on the ground. There was a beautiful red leaf that both of them were interested in collecting.
So for young children, it is the smallest things that matter. The 100 smells of mud and lichen, the spots on the fallen leaf, the sound of the soughing of the trees, the quivering of the earth beneath them.
I am so blessed to be able to spend so much time with my children. They help me remember.
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« Reply #8 on: May 18, 2010, 07:53:31 PM »

I have 529 words  and ive nicked picked it to death  
How many words over do they allow as a leeway if any? 

I think they allow 10% over the word limit. What is ten percent of 500?

(Boy, that feels like a back-to-math question! WN=10/100(500). Cheesy )
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« Reply #9 on: May 21, 2010, 10:58:15 PM »

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math is what i fail at completely according to career center of maine.   I qualify for training as a dislocated worker and they wont allow me to do so because i cant pass their math test. bet they couldnt run a store with no electric!  when the electric went out we had to do it paper pen add tax.  when they cashed up I was closer by doing it that way then when i had register!  I think i was off by a penny! avg for the cash register being off ? ranged from 1 to 3 dolllars.  They think that a person who cant do algebra cant do regular everyday math............. 
 
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wow herbalist!  cool   I have put in an herb garden this year and have been trying to learn about them.
one that amazes me to no end is the burdock!   edable roots, flower stock, and seeds   just floored me! 
i thought they were a total waste

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I grew up on a freshwater lake in maine never saw the ocen until i was 16 and that was from St John Canada.  and for food yes cranberries because we use to pick them ourselves in the bogs that surrounded the lake.  mother would can them for thanksgiving and christmas and when ever we had chicken or turkey 


Im on number 5 now but just thought id answer since i missed these responses  thanks
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